piece i'd like to revise

The genre is a short story, named Halloween.
I wrote about what I wanted to do that Halloween and about the candy I wanted to get. I said that I wanted to get a lot of more candy so my parents wouldn’t eat it all. I asked you some questions about candy, holidays, and if you liked your birthday or your favorite holiday the most.

I got most of my ideas from last year. I had an ok abundance of candy but my parents still ate it all. I wanted to get more candy that time so I could hide most of it and be sugared up all the time. The main idea that started my whole story was Halloween. Anyone could write about Halloween and at least have a paragraph.

How I would change it is I would write more about last year and more about the candy and define it deeper. I would ask different questions and be more thorough. Also, instead of asking so many questions I could answer & ask the question. Why I would change it is because it doesn’t look like a very good short little paragraph. I personally don’t think it’s a very good paragraph. I think there could be a lot better changes like putting an awubis, smiley face trick, or something else to make it better. Even better I could have put all of those things in together.